it could use some fixes, but overwell well done..
your spelling in some places was messed up...
and at some parts you couldn't really tell who was talking without reading the subtitles and at some places the noise got more quiet then it shouldve been...
do you have a friend or anything??
cause i advise you to make these and then have a friend watch them before submitting so you have a better chance of fixing the mistakes before they enter the portal that way you haVE a better chance of passing.. and if you were not to pass the people would complain about spelling mistakes and sound problems and then later blam you automaticly for no reason for resubmitting..
so yeah check up on a friend to test it out for little mistakes.